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How normal is it to submit to about 20 agents, then review my first chapter again and feel the strong urge to rewrite or cut more of it? Not sure if it is true realization that it needs a little tweaking or a bubble of panic since I haven't gotten any news, except one very nice rejection. 
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Intensely normal. I do it all the time- generally you look for now, better ways to say things when you're imagining how the agents could be looking at it.

A bit of a conundrum, yes?
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So a small publisher has asked to see full manuscript. I'm currently querying agents. Is there any harm in sending it anyways even if I'm fairly sure I wouldn't go that route? 
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Just be sure to check out the small publisher. There are many we need to be aware of out there and then there are some really good ones. If they turn around and ask you to pay for publishing.....you might want to shop around!
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I am looking for any feedback of a query draft. This is just the bones of the letter pertaining to the book. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated..Thank you

When Denny fired a fatal shot and condemned himself to 40 years in prison, he also condemned his pregnant girlfriend to a life trapped in the small town from which they were on the verge of escaping. 

In the 79,900 word novel The Demons of Denny Rouleau, teenage lovers are torn apart by the consequences of one night in the summer of 1969. Instead of heading to college in Boston, a robbery goes wrong and Denny has to endure decades of maximum security incarceration. His drug-induced choice to pull the trigger also leaves Jackie alone to use the resources and people around her to raise a child whose paternity she has kept secret. Life becomes more complicated for Jackie when her daughter follows in her footsteps by becoming a teenage mom, also. When Denny is released and returns to Unity, Maine, their lives collide as much older adults who still hunger for the freedom they both lost decades earlier. Jackie must then decide whether to continue the lies she told to protect her daughter and granddaughter or let Denny know he has a family, which could put everything she struggled to create at risk. 
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Thanks. I'm fine tuning it now. 
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This is the guts of a query letter for my first novel...any opinions or feedback would be appreciated..it will naturally be personalized for each agent I send it to...but I'd love impressions of the bones...

When Denny fired a fatal shot and condemned himself to 40 years in prison, he also condemned his pregnant girlfriend to a life trapped in the small town from which they were on the verge of escaping.
 
In the 79,900 word novel, The Demons of Denny Rouleau, teenage lovers are torn apart by the consequences of one night in the summer of 1969. Instead of heading to college in Boston, a robbery goes wrong and Denny has to endure decades of maximum security incarceration. His drug-induced choice to pull the trigger also leaves Jackie alone to use the resources and people around her to raise a child whose paternity she has kept secret. Life becomes more complicated for Jackie when her daughter follows in her footsteps by becoming a teenage mom, also. When Denny is released and returns to Unity, Maine, their lives collide as much older adults who still hunger for the freedom they both lost decades earlier. Jackie must then decide whether to continue the lies she told to protect her daughter and granddaughter or let Denny know he has a family, which could put everything she struggled to create at risk. 
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Ah, +Brittany Constable, my old school values showing through! Interesting to know, thanks!

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Revised hook for a query letter for my first novel...any advice or feedback would be oh-so appreciated..

After fatally shooting a store clerk, Denny Rouleau begins a 40 year prison term instead of starting college with his high school sweetheart, Jackie. After she discovers she is pregnant with their child, her own plans of escaping their small Maine town are ruined.
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Thank you Eric R. 
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I am looking for any opinion on a query letter. I have written a first draft of the query of my first novel. I want to submit to agents soon but want a little feedback on the query itself. Any input would be greatly appreciated. Thank you!
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The Demons of Denny Rouleau is an 89,000 word fiction novel set in a coastal Maine tourist town and tells of young love turned tragic, unfolding over decades of small town secrets and the confines of a maximum security prison. One mistake leads to a 40 year prison sentence for the protagonist as his high school love is then left alone, unknowingly pregnant in 1969 New England. 
The story unfolds as Jackie, the girlfriend left behind, struggles to raise a child alone trapped in a tourist town and tells of the parallel life Denny is leading trapped in prison until old age. The conflict peaks once Denny is released and returns to Unity, Maine. He discovers how the world and his former love moved on without him as he now struggles to begin his life anew. Jackie, upon realizing he is free, then wrestles with how to keep the secret she has hidden for decades, as she simultaneously grapples with moving forward with her own life, independent of being a mother and now grandmother. 
The first chapter is told from the perspective of their shared granddaughter, then from the perspective of Denny and Jackie both, spanning from their youth until the present conflicts they face. Denny’s demons spawn from his youthful mistakes and agony of unrealized dreams, and also in knowing the pain and suffering he caused Jackie. As he works to quell these demons and right the wrongs of his past, he is determined to help Jackie realize the dreams he destroyed for her years ago. Discovering he has a family, a fact that was hidden from all, threatens to further upend the lives of Denny, Jackie, their mentally ill daughter Clara, and granddaughter Janey.  
The novel will appeal to those who enjoy thoughtful narratives exploring varying perspectives from family members, who may not differ much from their own. The realistic struggles of those family members over decades mirrors those suffered by many in reality, including dealing with mental illness, small town secrets, unrealized potential, unexpected loss of parents, single motherhood, and the regrets that can keep us all up at night. It is also a story that richly reveals the unique landscape and lifestyle in coastal northern New England and will appeal to those who enjoy learning about or already know the area. I believe it can be successfully marketed toward those who find the location intriguing and a younger to middle-age female audience who enjoys a mix of romance and setting driven fiction with a focus on family relationships, particularly as women age and move beyond the role of caretakers and into a role of wanting to be cared for as a women. 
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That would be an ideal life Leo....just write and let it go. 
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Karri Moser

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I've been asked to send the full manuscript to a small publisher. I'm pretty sure I want to give the agents I've been querying a chance to respond and prefer to go that route. Is there any harm in sending it anyways and see what they think? 
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I've published two books already, you see on my profile and during my journey, I took advantage of all avenues. Only send a copy of your full M/S on request. Never send the original. Saying this, a request for the full M/S doesn't mean they will offer a contract; that being, which type of contract. 
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I've just started querying agents for my first novel. How many should I query before sitting back and relaxing a bit? I've found a good number currently open to submissions in my genre. Go for them all or a few at a time? 
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I found the advice on WeBook great when I wrote mine and they gave examples to illustrate what they meant. Here is the link: http://m.webook.com/landing/AgentInbox-QueryLetter

There are lots of advice online about it if you do a search and books. Good luck. 
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I'd love some feedback for the bare bones of a query letter. Any opinion or input would be appreciated. It would be personalized for a given agent, but this is the guts of the letter...thanks for any help...

When Denny fired a fatal shot and condemned himself to 40 years in prison, he also condemned his pregnant girlfriend to a life trapped in the small town from which they were on the verge of escaping.
 
In the 79,900 word novel The Demons of Denny Rouleau, teenage lovers are torn apart by the consequences of one night in the summer of 1969. Instead of heading to college in Boston, a robbery goes wrong and Denny has to endure decades of maximum security incarceration. His drug-induced choice to pull the trigger also leaves Jackie alone to use the resources and people around her to raise a child whose paternity she has kept secret. Life becomes more complicated for Jackie when her daughter follows in her footsteps by becoming a teenage mom, also. When Denny is released and returns to Unity, Maine, their lives collide as much older adults who still hunger for the freedom they both lost decades earlier. Jackie must then decide whether to continue the lies she told to protect her daughter and granddaughter or let Denny know he has a family, which could put everything she struggled to create at risk. 
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Thanks. I think I'll add that tidbit at the end in the bio/slash book length para. I haven't been published w fiction, just freelance work and credits in a travel/tourism book including having written for the maine tourism department. Think I'll add that too. I can't thank you enough fir the help and encouragement. 
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This is a revised hook for a query letter for my first novel..any advice or input would be appreciated...

After fatally shooting a store clerk, Denny Rouleau begins a 40 year prison term instead of starting college with his high school sweetheart, Jackie. When she discovers she is pregnant with their child, her own plans of escaping their small Maine town are ruined.
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Revised Hook for a query letter for my first novel..any new feedback would be greatly appreciated..

After fatally shooting a store clerk, Denny Rouleau begins a 40 year prison term instead of starting college with his high school sweetheart, Jackie. Her own plans of escaping their small Maine town are then ruined when she discovers she's pregnant with their child.
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I have just written my first draft of my first query letter for my first novel. I would like to seek out an agent after getting input or opinions on the query. Any feedback would be oh-so appreciated. It is pasted below and just general as it hasn't been customized for a particular agent yet. Thank you! 
Query Letter Draft 

The Demons of Denny Rouleau is an 89,000 word fiction novel set in a coastal Maine tourist town and tells of young love turned tragic, unfolding over decades of small town secrets and the confines of a maximum security prison. One mistake leads to a 40 year prison sentence for the protagonist as his high school love is then left alone, unknowingly pregnant in 1969 New England. 
The story unfolds as Jackie, the girlfriend left behind, struggles to raise a child alone trapped in a tourist town and tells of the parallel life Denny is leading trapped in prison until old age. The conflict peaks once Denny is released and returns to Unity, Maine. He discovers how the world and his former love moved on without him as he now struggles to begin his life anew. Jackie, upon realizing he is free, then wrestles with how to keep the secret she has hidden for decades, as she simultaneously grapples with moving forward with her own life, independent of being a mother and now grandmother. 
The first chapter is told from the perspective of their shared granddaughter, then from the perspective of Denny and Jackie both, spanning from their youth until the present conflicts they face. Denny’s demons spawn from his youthful mistakes and agony of unrealized dreams, and also in knowing the pain and suffering he caused Jackie. As he works to quell these demons and right the wrongs of his past, he is determined to help Jackie realize the dreams he destroyed for her years ago. Discovering he has a family, a fact that was hidden from all, threatens to further upend the lives of Denny, Jackie, their mentally ill daughter Clara, and granddaughter Janey.  
The novel will appeal to those who enjoy thoughtful narratives exploring varying perspectives from family members, who may not differ much from their own. The realistic struggles of those family members over decades mirrors those suffered by many in reality, including dealing with mental illness, small town secrets, unrealized potential, unexpected loss of parents, single motherhood, and the regrets that can keep us all up at night. It is also a story that richly reveals the unique landscape and lifestyle in coastal northern New England and will appeal to those who enjoy learning about or already know the area. I believe it can be successfully marketed toward those who find the location intriguing and a younger to middle-age female audience who enjoys a mix of romance and setting driven fiction with a focus on family relationships, particularly as women age and move beyond the role of caretakers and into a role of wanting to be cared for as a women. 
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Thank you so much. I plan to keep the query mostly about Denny as his actions are the catalyst and the book title focuses on him. I will check out the link for feedback. This forum alone has been a great resource too, I truly appreciate the input and help
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    BA English Literature, 1992 - 1997
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