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I think the way it's delivered is at least better than ill bill. And I'm sure this song is not advocating what they did.....more to gain knowledge as to why they did what they did. Kind of like the rob zombie version of Halloween. Background, reasoning yada. I believe this song is better for that reason. And it's explained in a way that you can picture it. Story telling in a song....which is what's supposed to happen as I recall songs are supposed to be.
And this is why your head is too big about your work. You want to be this great horror core artist and this is NOT going to get you there. I don't know who is listening to your stuff. You are far from where you need to be. If you want to get signed, this is not how you're going to get there. Your rhymes are weak. They don't even rhyme. Your flow is tormenting my brain. I'm not trying to be a bitch but this is the reality. You sing when you honestly can carry a tune. Your beats are weak and taking other peoples beats oh and "featuring" them in your song. That's a HUGE NO NO! You don't have the rights for that and if these people get wind of it you can be in some shit up to your neck. Don't be a dumbass. Work on it. Perfect it before you push it out. Record labels will look at you like you're a joke and be offended by what you put out. Just being real with you since obviously no one else wants to be.
There are so many things wrong with this. If you're being serious about this take the time and effort to perfect it. First it sounds like you have lungs of a god because not once did you take a breath (you can hear where you didn't cut it right). Don't rap about other wannabe MCs. You are one. Thirdly, to perfect the no rhyming aspect, you need to execute it with awe. You don't. At all. Don't add in Butters into your song, he made it that much worse. Make a better beat. It's way too weak. I have no idea where the hook is. Which means you have no break. Which means it sounds like a lot of ramble of nothingness. Get some friends who will be honest with you and tell you if you suck. It's called constructive criticism. No point in having people tell you it's good when it's not. If you want to be a real MC and a damn good one you are far from it. Do your research. Perfect you're stuff before you put it out. If you aim to get signed this is not going to get you there.