Profile

Cover photo
Mary S. Sentoza
Lives in Canada
1,761 followers|344,514 views
AboutPostsPhotosYouTube+1's

Stream

Mary S. Sentoza

Shared publicly  - 
 
I'm reading Adolescence. Check it out: http://episodeinteractive.com/r/s/6211959277486080
2
Amin Belmabrouke's profile photo
 
superb <3
Add a comment...

Mary S. Sentoza

Shared publicly  - 
 
I know it's been a while since I posted. I decided to pop in and say hello. 
3
Roland Boykin's profile photoMary S. Sentoza's profile photo
8 comments
 
I'm glad you did. If there is anything else you like me to mention just tell me and I'll do my best 
Add a comment...
 
I am writing a story, and I am having a little trouble. I have a character, who's a 15 year old girl. How do I indicate that she was not that sociable, and it never really bothered her? Also how to indicate that she was glad people were in her life, and they lived nearby in order to be in close contact with them? Is there a way to say these things through my writing?
3
Brittany Constable's profile photoRene V's profile photoBrooke Johnson's profile photoGary Martin's profile photo
9 comments
 
There is always a way to say things in a story.  That doesn't mean that it's easy.  My opinion is that it has to be done through the character's actions.  If it's done right the reader will understand without being told directly.

PS  This is from someone who is still learning.
Add a comment...

Mary S. Sentoza

Shared publicly  - 
 
I will not be post here for a while, my dad is very sick. The doctors are unable to help him, as his #cancer had spread too quickly. I could tell he is very sick. Right now I don't have the patient to social network. I may post my blogs this week. After that I will take a hiatus. I need time to spend with my father of whatever time he has left. #sick #break
1
Mary S. Sentoza's profile photo
 
Thank you!
Add a comment...

Mary S. Sentoza

Shared publicly  - 
2
Add a comment...

Mary S. Sentoza

Shared publicly  - 
 
The #weather man was right when he said we are going to have sleet. Crazy weather. Those of you who are driving, please be careful. Drive slowly. If you can't continue, pull over to the side. #weatherstorm
1
Add a comment...
Have her in circles
1,761 people
Kevin Montano's profile photo
Metropolis - Live Band Hire, Event Production & PlannersPod Podcast's profile photo
Jim Bong's profile photo
vikas yadav's profile photo
Jasmine Roy's profile photo
alexander akaab's profile photo
Stephen Shawcross (Beautykinguk)'s profile photo
AutomobileReviewed's profile photo
Jeevan Sharma's profile photo

Mary S. Sentoza

Shared publicly  - 
 
Hey everyone. I know it's been a while since I posted. I've been quite busy since I moved to the new house. Now I'm having the whole house painted.
1
Add a comment...

Mary S. Sentoza

Shared publicly  - 
 
I recently saw on Kijiji that a brand new 15" MacBook Pro 2015 is selling for $700. It says that the person has health issues, and needs money. Needs it sold fast. Most ones I've seen go for $1800-2500. Do you think it's a scam? 
1
1
Shoaib Raja's profile photo‫علي قصي‬‎'s profile photo
2 comments
 
. 
Add a comment...
 
I finished writing my book, and now I am editing my story. I am told to avoid certain words as they are telling.

What alternatives for saying these words. I want another word or way for saying them: s (ex: he and his friends looked shocked as she yelled at them).

looked
realize
felt
thought
notice

3
Mary S. Sentoza's profile photoDaniel Torres's profile photoN J Slater's profile photoBryce Anderson's profile photo
28 comments
 
+N J Slater :  Agreed.  Not the Sophie McDougal part, because I've never read her.  But "show don't tell" seems to be a blank slate bit of advice: everyone seems to think it means something different, some of the interpretations are simply crazy and wrong, and (like any bit of writing advice) you can overdo it.

[Tangent: recently I came across a book blogger's "swearing is just poor writing" rant, which was poorly written itself.  But one of the points the rant tried to sell was that having your character swear was "telling, not showing."  The reasoning didn't make a whole lot of sense.]

I think it was one of our members, Jefferson Smith, who reframed my thinking.  The real goal is "be more interesting," and various means of "showing, not telling" are tactics for accomplishing that goal.

That frame of mind keeps you from falling into bad writing advice traps.  "Don't just say, 'Mary opened the door.'  _Show_ her opening the door."  Um... okay.  I mean, if there's a way to make the way she opens the door relevant to the reader.  Otherwise, just hurry and get her into the room so the next interesting thing can happen.
Add a comment...

Mary S. Sentoza

Shared publicly  - 
 
RIP! Bye dad. May you rest in peace.
3
Mary S. Sentoza's profile photoWilliam M Dean's profile photo
2 comments
 
So sorry to hear, Mary. My heart goes out to you.
Add a comment...

Mary S. Sentoza

Shared publicly  - 
 
Interesting way of putting it. Great #quote #reading #bookworm
3
1
Add a comment...

Mary S. Sentoza

Shared publicly  - 
 
 
Benjamin already knows that it is his time now, that now he needs to act if he wants her back. That Sara's daughter supports him, even wants him to take that step can only be good. His goal is to make Sara happy, the question is only if she will let him, or if the 20 years of abuse by her husband made it impossible. After all it was his fault she ended up with the man in the first place.
Find out more and get Waiting in the Wings http://nickie.freehostia.com/prestashop/22-e-books-by-nicole-kiefer here or at any major retail platform for books.
View original post
1
1
Add a comment...
People
Have her in circles
1,761 people
Kevin Montano's profile photo
Metropolis - Live Band Hire, Event Production & PlannersPod Podcast's profile photo
Jim Bong's profile photo
vikas yadav's profile photo
Jasmine Roy's profile photo
alexander akaab's profile photo
Stephen Shawcross (Beautykinguk)'s profile photo
AutomobileReviewed's profile photo
Jeevan Sharma's profile photo
Work
Occupation
Unemployed
Basic Information
Gender
Female
Story
Tagline
I am a blogger and a writer. You can view at my website at www.marysentoza.com
Introduction
I am the only child, and currently live in Canada. I have two blog websites. The first one is called Blogz Within and it is on a variety of topics. The other one entitled Mary S. Sentoza deals with writing and disabilities. I am currently completing my short story booklet, and hope in a few months it will be published.
Bragging rights
I have a blog that I publish on a weekly basis
Places
Map of the places this user has livedMap of the places this user has livedMap of the places this user has lived
Currently
Canada
Mary S. Sentoza's +1's are the things they like, agree with, or want to recommend.
19+ Facebook Timeline Features and Resources You Should Know! | Social @...
www.wchingya.com

Think you know everything about Facebook Timeline? Check the list and equip yourself with more than 19+ handy tips and resources to rock you