Hey +Aleks Bahdanovich
, I went through and did a critique on this. I used the Track Changes feature of MS Word 2010 to make edits, comments, and such. Below is a link to the document. You may or may not be able to view the full comments and edits in your browser - if you can't, then you'll just have to download the file. Let me know if you have problems viewing it and I'll work something out. If you don't have Word, you should be able to view everything correctly with Open Office or Libre Office, which are both free. I liked this, but it can be improved, and I think you have the ability to take it to the next level. Here you go:https://www.dropbox.com/s/fw6ywal8tlgd2be/Thrill%20Kill.docx
Let me know if you have questions or anything else. Keep writing!