I really like it. This is really not to hurt you at all and if this sounds rude even the slightest bit you can tell me okay? Okay! here I go. It would be great if when the girl didn't just say hi to a guy that she just met and then he asks right away if she wants t go on a date. Maybe that should wait? Because in real life you would wait a bit, right? also. when you are typing I would say what you need to say before recording to make sure that it gets everything you say.
Keep in in mind that these are tips meant to help you. Not to make you upset. Again sorry if this comment offended you and tell me if it did. Other than these simple mistakes I would love to watch more! BYE!
PS sorry my comment is so long I love writing!