Looks pretty good.
I would recommend shooting if you can (i know my camera will not allow it) (and defiantly editing) in progressive instead of interlaced because that will get rid of the lines on the edges of moving people.
Also you might consider fading the sound bites of a shot in before you show the shot so that it is less abrupt for the viewer. If you can split where the sound and video change shots, even slightly, it will make your whole production slightly smother.
All in all you have a very well put together video, that I would be proud of...